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The answer provides a general overview of the immigration trends but lacks clarity and precision. There are several grammatical errors and the vocabulary is limited. The coherence and cohesion could be improved with better organization and clearer connections between ideas.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 20 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 7 | |
| Lexical resource | 6 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5 | |
| Task response | 2 |
Question
The bar chart displays the annual number of immigrants to the United States from four regions (Asia, Europe, Latin America, and Africa) from 2015 to 2020. Describe the trends and notable points in the immigration patterns.
Compare the immigration numbers from each region over the given years.
Identify any regions with significant increases or decreases.
Discuss the possible implications of these trends.
#Immigration and Emigration
#Bar Chart
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This data demonstrates the annual number of immigrants to the
united states
from four regions between 2015 to 2020
. Overall, Asia has the largest amount of immigrants to Africa. This rate gradually growing throughout the year and
it keeps fluctuated due to the slight decline on 2020.Asia starts with 800 immigrants on 2015, followed with Europe, Latin America and Africa.
However, despite
asia
having the steady rise compared to its competitive regions such as Europe and Latin Americ, both regions
experiences
the stable expansion through 2015 to 2020, it
doesn't
show any significant drop compared to Africa that remains constant to three other regions.
On 2019, Asia's immigrant population to united states
rose up
quickly to more than 900 immigrants in one year, defeating its first immigration history on 2015. On the second place, Europe with its constant trends, doesnt
displays any significant jump and only go up by 50 on 2016. Similar to europe
, Latinas and Africans remained stable between 2015 to 2018
, these two regions immigrations does not show any notable growth and keep steadily rising only less than 50 peoples.