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The response provides a basic comparison of crime rates in Tokyo and Seoul, but lacks clarity and precision in data interpretation. Grammatical errors and limited vocabulary affect coherence and task achievement, while the logical flow is disrupted by awkward phrasing.
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| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 15 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5 | |
| Lexical resource | 5 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 2 |
Question
Seoul
Tokyo
Examine the crime rates across different categories in Tokyo and Seoul for the year 2020 as presented in the pie charts.
Summarize the distribution of crime rates in both cities.
Compare the predominant crime category in Tokyo with that in Seoul.
Discuss any significant differences or similarities noted in the crime rates between Tokyo and Seoul.
#Crime Rates
#Pie Chart
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These pie charts show the averages of crime in Tokyo and Seoul in 2020. It is clear from the graphs that the Property Crime demonstrate the highest
precentages
in both cities
and the Cybercrime had the smallest rates as well.According to what is shown, the Cybercrime
represent
the lowest rates with only 10% from the total of different crime classification in both cities. While the Drug Offenses
and the Violent Crime had the double rate in Seoul with 10%, 5% increase from Tokyo accordingly. Only 5% increase rate of Fraud in Tokyo and same
grew up rate of Violent Crime in Seoul which is exceed
the numbers of crime in Tokyo.To sum up, we could say that there are overall similarities of crime
precentages
for both charts with slight differences that didn't
exceed more than 10% and the Propery Crime had the biggest portion with 30% and above.