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5.5
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20 Mar 25, 04:38
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The response provides a basic overview of the transportation modes in Tokyo and Paris but lacks clarity and accuracy in data representation. Grammatical structures are mostly correct, but the coherence and cohesion are weak, leading to a disjointed narrative.
Overall score5.5
Grammatical range and accuracy6.0
Lexical resource6.0
Coherence & cohesion5.0
Task response4.0
Total Errors9
Grammatical range and accuracy1
Lexical resource1
Coherence & cohesion4
Task response3

Writing Task

#Transportation
#Pie Chart
Examine the pie charts detailing the modes of transportation utilized in Tokyo and Paris in 2021.
Identify the major modes of transportation in each city.
Compare and contrast the transportation preferences between Tokyo and Paris.
Discuss any patterns or anomalies in the data.

Paris

Tokyo

Submitted Answer

Words150|Paragraphs6
English:UK English
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These pie charts illustrate the proportion of transportation methods used in Tokyo and Paris in 2021, showing the distribution among six different vehicles.
Overall, the train and metro were the most significant modes of transportation in both Tokyo and Paris.The train and metro were the most widely used modes of transportation in Tokyo and Paris, accounting for 50.0% and 30.0% of the total, respectively.
The share of train usage increased significantly, reaching almost 50%.
Bus usage showed a significant decrease, falling to 20.0% in Tokyo and 25.0% in Paris.Car services in Tokyo were replaced by Paris car services, with a 5% increase in Paris.
The remaining three vehicles, including bicycles, accounted for around 10.0% in both countries.
Walking was the least used mode of transportation in both countries, but in Paris, it accounted for 10.0%, compared to a lower percentage in Tokyo

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