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The answer provides a general comparison of water usage in California and New York, but it lacks clarity and precision in some areas. There are grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that affect readability and coherence. The task achievement is adequate but could be more detailed and accurate.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 6.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 12 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 2 | |
| Lexical resource | 4 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 2 |
Question
New York
California
Compare the water usage in different sectors in California and New York in 2022.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
Make comparisons where relevant.
Highlight any significant differences or similarities.
#Water Usage
#Pie Chart
Submitted Answer
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The two pie charts above shows the percentage of water usage in different sectors in two cities (Carlifornia and New York) in 2022.The diagrams are divided into five sectors namely: Agriculture, Domestic, Industrial, Public Services and Others in both towns.
Overall, Domestic sector stands out to have the highest rate with 40% in New York and second to Agriculture in Carlifornia with 30%. As far as farming is concerned it shows to have significantly dropped in New York to 20% which is half of what it occupies in the
other
town. It is clear that the rates combined between these towns it is the second highest in using water.With respect to the Industrial departments New York occupies a larger portion
upto
25% whilst it is positioned third in the other
state.Public services in constantly steady in both states with 10% . There are no changes in projected in both states.
Finally,
other
sections possess the least figures filling approximately 5% in both towns.Overall, the majority of the fields have very slight difference in comparison to each
other
, which can predict that the people both
states share similar usage rates,