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The response provides a general overview of the data but lacks clarity and precision in describing trends and comparisons. Frequent grammatical errors and limited vocabulary range affect the overall coherence and readability of the text.

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Writing Task

#Employment Sectors

#Table

The table illustrates the percentage of workforce employed in different sectors (Technology, Healthcare, Education, Manufacturing) in four cities over the last five years (2016-2020).

Describe the trends in employment percentages for each sector.

Compare the employment changes among the four cities.

Highlight any significant shifts or unusual patterns.

Year	New York	London	Tokyo	Sydney
2016	30	25	35	20
2017	32	27	33	22
2018	34	28	32	23
2019	33	30	34	24
2020	36	32	36	25

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The table shows the

propotion

of workers employed in many sectors as (Technology,Healthcare,Education and Manufacturing) in 4 regions(New York,London,Tokoyo and Syndney) from 2016 to 2020.

Overall, the percentage of workers employed in Tokoyo was the

highest

of the 4 cities in 2016, but then experienced a decline in 2017 and 2018,

wherease

there was a

countinuing

upward trend in the other cities.

The

highest

propotion

of employees was in Tokoyo for 35% ,followed by

slightly

decrease by 2 to 32% in 2017 and 2018,

respictively

. And increased again in the final years.

New york

was the

secound

city of employees in 2016 ,until it climbed rapidly to

replaced

Tokoyo to be the

highest

percentage for 2 years , achieving a 32% and 34% in 2017 and 2018. Then fell around 1% in 2019 , to shows a notable increased in 2020 to be the

highest

percentage of workforce employed with Tokoyo by 36%.

The remaining competitors had the lowest percentage of employees . London

start

with 25% of workers, Then shows an increase

around

1% in the

secound

2 years. To

acheive

the

third

highest

percentage in 2020 ,

achevieng

pecentage

of 32%.

the

lowest

propotion

of workers was in Sydney with a percentage of 20% in 2016, despite a minor increase by around 1% in the given period.

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