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03 Nov 24, 14:30
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The response provides a clear overview of the data trends but contains several spelling and grammatical errors. The vocabulary is adequate, though some terms are repeated, and the structure could be more logically organized.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 6.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 15 | |
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| Lexical resource | 10 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 1 |
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| Year | Canada (%) | Australia (%) | Brazil (%) | India (%) |
|---|---|---|---|---|
| 2016 | 27 | 30 | 22 | 15 |
| 2017 | 28 | 31 | 23 | 16 |
| 2018 | 29 | 32 | 24 | 17 |
| 2019 | 30 | 33 | 25 | 18 |
| 2020 | 31 | 34 | 26 | 19 |
| 2021 | 32 | 35 | 27 | 20 |
Examine the data on the percentage of the population with obesity in selected countries from 2016 to 2021.
Identify the main trends.
Compare the obesity rates between countries.
Note any significant increases or decreases.
#Health and Fitness
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Submitted Answer
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The table
gives
information about the percentuage
of people affected by obesity in four countries between 2016 and 2021.Throughtout these 6 years this disease (obesity) was growing considerably in all countries, with highest
percentuage
of obesity people in Australia and the lowest one in India.As said
previosly
, Australia had the highest percentuage
of people on overweight, starting from 30% in 2016 and growing 1% steadly
each year until 2021 when it reached 35%. This country was followed by Canada and Brazil: Canada had percentuage
of 27 of people with obesity in 2016, ending with 32% after 5 years (2021) and Brazil started with 22% and finishing with 27%. The country which had the lowest percentuage
with people overweight was India with 15% in 2016, increasing each year 1% and ending with 20%. People from India seemed to be healthier than the people from the other countries, whereas Australia was the unhealthy compared to the other countries.