IELTS Writing Academic Checker - Sample Band 7.5
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The response accurately describes the data from the pie charts, with clear comparisons between South Korea and Japan. However, the coherence could be improved by better structuring the information, and the vocabulary could be more varied to enhance the description.
| Overall score | 7.5 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 8.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 7.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 7.0 | |
| Task response | 7.0 |
| Total Errors | 8 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 1 | |
| Lexical resource | 3 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 1 |
Writing Task
#Immigration and Emigration
#Pie Chart
Interpret the pie charts showing the education levels of emigrants from South Korea and Japan in 2018.
Summarize the education levels of emigrants from each country.
Compare the proportions of each education level between South Korea and Japan.
Identify any notable trends or differences in the data.
Japan
South Korea
Submitted Answer
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The pie charts show the education levels of emigrants from South Korea and Japan in 2018. In South Korea, most of the emigrants hold a Bachelor's degree, which occupies a third of the population. However, the Master's degree number is only 15%, which
makes
up
the half of Bachelor's degree. High school level has 20% while Associate degree has 25% of the emigrants. The least is Doctorate, which makes
the 10% of the data.In Japan, most of the emigrants hold a Bachelor's degree and
make
up more than a third of the population, which is 35%. However, the Doctorate has 10% which is the lowest. High school level has 15% while Associate's and Master's degrees share the same number, making
up a fifth of the data.In both countries, approximately a third of the emigrants held a Bachelor's degree: 30% in South Korea and 35% in Japan. However, both countries have the same number of Doctorate holders, which is 10% of the emigrants in each country, and
make
up the least of each population.