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The response provides a basic comparison of employment sectors in Paris and Beijing, but lacks clarity and precision in data interpretation. Grammatical errors and limited vocabulary affect coherence and task achievement.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 20 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 8 | |
| Lexical resource | 7 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 2 |
Writing Task
#Employment Sectors
#Pie Chart
The pie charts depict the employment sector percentages for Paris, France and Beijing, China for the year 2019.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
Make comparisons where relevant.
Paris
Beijing
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The pie charts
illustrates
the percentage of emplyment
in two countries like France and China, especially in Paris and Beijing, in 2019.Overall, Paris demonstrates more the amount of
employess
than China, but there is not so big differences
among the statistics.Firstly, in Paris the
biggest number
of emplyess
is in Finance it
shows the percentage of 30. Also
there is a tourism and a technology whish are depicts the percentage of employment with numbers 25 and 20 per cent. The lowest percentage is a healthcare
which is contain
only 15 per cent of emplyment
.Secondly, Beijing is
demonstrate
another statistics of employment. For instance, in finance and tourism it is 25 and 20 per cent, lower to 5 per cent than in Paris. But in technology the figure of employment is bigger to 10 per cent than in Paris which is contain
30 per cent. And the last employment is a healthcare which is illustrates the same percentage as in Paris, it is 15 per cent.