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The response provides a basic description of the data but lacks clarity and precision in language. Grammatical errors and awkward phrasing affect coherence, while the task achievement is limited by insufficient data analysis and inaccurate interpretations.
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Writing Task

#Education Levels
#Pie Chart
The pie charts illustrate the educational levels of the population in Japan and Brazil in 2023. Describe the data presented.
Identify the predominant educational level in each country.
Compare the proportion of tertiary education between the two countries.
Highlight any significant differences or similarities in the data.

Japan

Brazil

Submitted Answer

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The pie charts illustrated the educational levels of the population of the two different countries in the year
2023
which is the Japan and Brazil.
As you can
see
on the pie chart of Japan it indicated the predominant educational level in Japan is the Secondary Education. They have a lot of students enrolled in the level of education in
Japan
as the chart
shows
. In the country of Brazil,
same
with the First chart in comes up that the secondary education level is the predominant education level. As you can
see
both countries have the same predominant educational
level
which
shows
that most of the Students specifically "teenagers" are enrolled
on
the secondary education.
As you can
see
on the pie
charts
Japan
have
the biggest population of students who are enrolled
in
the tertiary level with the percentage of 30.0
%
which
shows
that they have a lot of students who
continued
their education
in
the tertiary level.
Unlike with the Brazil country the percentage is only 20.0% which
shows
that have of the Secondary Educational Level in Brazil,
didn't
continue
their schooling due to
finacial
problem
.
You can
see
that Japan
have
the guts to still
continue
their study until Master's Degree with the percentage of 14.0% they really valued their
education
unlike in the
Brazil
only 7.0% of students coming from the bachelor's degree
continued
their schooling in
Master Degree
.
But overall, we can
see
the
Education is very important in all countries as they
priorities
to
finished
their study and have a Bachelor's or Master's degree.

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