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11 Apr 25, 06:41
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The response provides a basic comparison of water usage in California and New York, but lacks clarity and precision in data interpretation. Grammatical errors and awkward phrasing affect coherence, while vocabulary is limited and repetitive.
Overall score5.0
Grammatical range and accuracy5.0
Lexical resource5.0
Coherence & cohesion5.0
Task response5.0
Total Errors14
Grammatical range and accuracy4
Lexical resource5
Coherence & cohesion3
Task response2

Writing Task

#Water Usage
#Pie Chart
Compare the water usage in different sectors in California and New York in 2022.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
Make comparisons where relevant.
Highlight any significant differences or similarities.

New York

California

Submitted Answer

Words183|Paragraphs5
English:UK English
Global Issues:
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Logical Flow
Bullet Point Missing or Incomplete
The pie charts illustrate the water consumption in various sectors in California and New York in 2022.
Overall,
domestic
usage was the
highest
consumer of water if both states
combined together
in 2022, and which was accounted for 35% from overall.
In California, agriculture sector was in the top with about 40%, however it was the
third
highest
sector in terms of the water usage in 2020 with about 20%
and,
it right half by comparing two states. Despite this,
domestic
usage was the second
highest
with 30% in California, while
domestic
usage was the
highest
consumption of the water with
share
of 40%.
In addition to that, in California, water consumption for
industrial
sector was 1.5 times
higher
than the water usage for public services.
In New York,
domestic
usage was hold the top sector of water usage with 40%, while others such as agriculture, industrial, public services and other sectors with 20%, 25%, 10% and 5%, respectively. Furthermore, consumption of water in two sectors in New York are
higher
than in the California, while others are remained same and decrease.

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