IELTS Writing Academic Checker - Sample Band 6

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The response provides a general overview of the data but lacks clarity and precision in describing trends and comparisons. Grammatical errors and awkward phrasing affect readability, while vocabulary use is adequate but not varied.
Overall score6.0
Grammatical range and accuracy6.0
Lexical resource6.0
Coherence & cohesion6.0
Task response5.0
Total Errors13
Grammatical range and accuracy7
Lexical resource1
Coherence & cohesion3
Task response2

Writing Task

#Population Growth
#Pie Chart
The pie charts show the population distribution by age group in 2020 and projected for 2050 for the city of Tokyo.
Compare the proportions of each age group in 2020 and 2050.
Identify any significant changes in the age distribution.
Discuss potential reasons for the observed trends.

Tokyo 2020

Tokyo 2050

Submitted Answer

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English:UK English
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The pie charts illustrate the proportion of population divided by age group in 2020 and projectile percentage in 2050 in Tokyo.
Overall,
age
group 25-54, was the most populated in the 2020 as well it will be the most populated in the 2050. Despite, category will decrease its proportion with compared to the 30 years before.
The younger people of Tokyo was higher than the older
people
with approximately 50% in 2020. But in 2050 elder population will become just over to younger people and will become the highest, while other all categories
lost
its
share in 2050.
Furthermore
birthrate in Tokyo will be decreased by around 2% in 2050 as it shown proportion decline in age group 0-14.
By contrast, the share of age group 25-54 was 40% in 2020
and
it will recede by 5% in 2050, and it will come around 35% by averaging 1% drop in every 6 years. In 2020, 65 years and over people were about one in five, and as per the projected it will rise just under to one in three in 2050.

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