IELTS Writing Academic Checker - Sample Band 6
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The response provides a general overview of the data but contains several grammatical errors and lacks clarity in some parts. The task achievement is adequate, but the coherence and cohesion could be improved with better organization and linking of ideas.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 11 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 2 | |
| Lexical resource | 4 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 2 |
Question
2019
2023
The pie charts show the percentage distribution of various crime types in Sydney for the years 2019 and 2023.
Compare the distribution of crime types in Sydney for both years.
Highlight any significant changes in the types of crimes between 2019 and 2023.
Discuss the possible reasons behind these changes.
#Crime Rates
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The pie charts illustrate the proportion distribution of various crime categories in Sydney from years 2019 to 2023.
Overall, the percentage of theft was the highest in both years. The last place belonged to vandalism. Besides, assault and drug
offenses
were having upward trends. Theft and Robbery face a marked downturn.In 2019, theft topped the list, with 40%. The second place belonged to assault was a half on assault, at 20%. The figures for Robbery and Drug
Offenses
share a similar percentage, with 15%. Finally, at the bottom of the list was Vandalism, at 10%.By 2023, Theft was decreased slightly but was still at the top of the list, with 35%. On the other hand, assault and drug
offenses
was
experienced an increase, with 25% and 20%, respectively. Robbery fall down and vandalism stay remain however share a similar percentage, at 10%.