IELTS Writing Academic Checker - Sample Band 6
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The response provides a clear overview of the data, but there are several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that affect clarity. The task is generally achieved, but more precise language and better organization would improve coherence and cohesion.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 6.0 |
| Total Errors | 15 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 6 | |
| Lexical resource | 5 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 1 |
Question
2019
2023
The pie charts show the percentage distribution of various crime types in Sydney for the years 2019 and 2023.
Compare the distribution of crime types in Sydney for both years.
Highlight any significant changes in the types of crimes between 2019 and 2023.
Discuss the possible reasons behind these changes.
#Crime Rates
#Pie Chart
Submitted Answer
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The pie charts illustrate the proportion distribution of
various
crime categories in Sydney from years 2019 to 2023.Overall, the percentage of theft was the highest in both years. The last place belonged to vandalism. Besides, assault and drug
offenses
were having upward trends. Theft and Robbery face a marked downturn.In 2019, the first place belonged to theft, with 40% distribution of
various
crime
. While assault followed with half of the figure, at 20% distribution of various
crime. Next, Robbery and drug offenses
share a similar percentage, with 15% distribution of various
crime
. The last place belonged to vandalism with the proportion, at 10% distribution of various
crime
.By 2023, at the top of the list, Theft had fallen down
but
it was still at the top of the list, with 35% distribution of various
crime. On the other hand, Assault had increased slightly and remained at second place, with 25% distribution of various
crime. Robbery had decreased and share similar with vandalism became the bottom of the list, with 10% distribution of various
crime
. Finally, Drug offenses
were increased and double the percentage of Robbery and vandalism, at 20% distribution of various
crime.