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The response provides a basic overview of the employment sectors in Tokyo and Seoul, but lacks clarity and precision in language. Grammatical errors and awkward phrasing affect coherence, while the task achievement is limited by insufficient detail and analysis of the data.
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Coherence & cohesion5.0
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Writing Task

#Employment Sectors
#Pie Chart
Examine the employment sectors in Tokyo and Seoul in 2021, as shown in the pie charts.
Outline the key features of each pie chart.
Compare the employment sector distributions between Tokyo and Seoul.
Highlight any significant trends or differences.

Seoul

Tokyo

Submitted Answer

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English:UK English
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The pie chart provides information in different job industries based in two Cities, Namely, Tokyo and Seoul in 2021.
Overall, The manufacturing is the top industry for both cities, followed by, the healthcare, and the third is the finance, and the fourth is the education and lowest in the employment sector for two cities is the retail industry.
To begin with, the highest in the percentage is the manufacturing, In which, the percentage for Tokyo is 40% and 35% for Seoul. The Seoul, had 25% in the healthcare which is the second to the highest in the percentage. Whereas, the Tokyo was 20%. The finance, is the third which is 15% for Tokyo, and 20 for Seoul. The fourth place in the job sector is the education, In which, the Tokyo was 15% and Seoul is 10%. Finally, the lowest in given pie chart is the
retail
which is 10% for the Tokyo. Whereas, 10% for the retail. It can
observed
that both Tokyo and Seoul provided an identical percentage for the retail sector.

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