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The response effectively describes the transportation preferences in Tokyo and London, accurately reflecting the data. However, minor grammatical errors and occasional awkward phrasing slightly affect clarity and coherence.
| Overall score | 7.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 7.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 7.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 7.0 | |
| Task response | 7.0 |
| Total Errors | 10 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 3 | |
| Lexical resource | 3 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 1 |
Question
Tokyo
London
Examine the transportation preferences of people in Tokyo and London in 2022.
Identify and compare the most and least popular modes of transportation in each city.
Discuss any significant differences between the two cities.
Suggest potential factors contributing to these differences.
#Transportation
#Pie Chart
Submitted Answer
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The pie chart provides a visual representation of people's modes transportation-Train, Bus, Car, Bicycle and Walking in Tokyo and London in 2022.
Overall, it is evident from the data that Train had the highest rates in both cities, significantly outpacing the other means of transportation.Bus and Car hosted a noteworthy percentage, while Bicycle and Walking had a comparatively lower turnover.
Train figures were particularly striking in Tokyo, with nearly 50% of passengers preferring to use trains.In fact, nearly half of the population preferred train in Tokyo, which is 50% shy of the highest possible engagement rate. On the other hand, London recorded 35% of people who prefer to use trains as transport, which is 15% shy of Tokyo's rate.
Conversely, walking ranked the lowest in Tokyo and London at approximately 5% in both states, which is only one twentieth of passengers walking. This suggests a constant
perfomance
in the two countries.Bus accounted for the
second largest
group in both Tokyo and London
with around 20% and 25% respectively. Following closely behind, Car had about 15% in Tokyo and 20% in London, placing it just above Bicycle by a margin of 5% in both cities, thus securing the third position. Consequently, Bicycle occupied fourth position in both in both
Tokyo and London.In conclusion, it is clear that people's mode of transportation rates varied significantly across cities, others dismally lower than others.Nevertheless, predicting future trends remain uncertain.