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The response provides a general overview of water usage in Australia and Brazil, but lacks precision in data interpretation and contains grammatical errors. Improved coherence and a wider range of vocabulary would enhance the clarity and effectiveness of the analysis.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 6.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 13 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 4 | |
| Lexical resource | 4 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 2 |
Question
Brazil
Australia
Analyze the distribution of water usage in different sectors in Australia and Brazil for the year 2021.
Describe the main trends and key features.
Compare the differences and similarities between the two regions.
Identify any significant patterns or anomalies.
#Water Usage
#Pie Chart
Submitted Answer
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The pie chart illustrates the comparison of the amount of water used by Australian and Brazilian, which are categorized in different areas (agricultural, household, factory, public services, and
other
) in 2021. Units are measured in percentage.Overall, it is evident that the agricultural usage accounted most of the proportion, followed
by the use of
water in household area. In the last place was other
usage
which always stood as the least of all.In terms of Australia, water usage is predominantly used for agriculture purposes, initially around 50%. Moreover, the use in household and factory area stayed in the same value for considerably around 20% and exactly 15% of the proportion. However, Australian showed that they did not
made
a large number to allocate in the community service or others, reaching only 5%.Regarding Brazil, agricultural usage witnessed an
enormouse
trend for over 40%. On the other
hand, the rest of usage does not show a dramatic fall and stayed in the same rank, with 25% of
domestic purposes and 20% for factory purposes. The use of civilian service in Brazil reached its troughs with only 5% as the same value as other
purposes.