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The response accurately describes the data and trends, with good grammatical accuracy and a range of structures. However, the coherence could be improved by better linking the comparisons between the two countries, and the vocabulary could be more varied to enhance clarity and precision.

Overall score	6.5
Grammatical range and accuracy	5.0
Lexical resource	7.0
Coherence & cohesion	7.0
Task response	7.0

Writing Task

#Immigration and Emigration

#Pie Chart

The pie charts below illustrate the immigrant population by continent in the USA and Brazil in 2020. Describe the distribution and main trends.

Outline the key features of each pie chart.

Analyze the differences in immigrant populations between the USA and Brazil.

Mention any unexpected trends.

USA

Brazil

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The pie chart exhibits the distribution of immigrants

in USA

and Brazil for the year, 2020. Here, it is shown that the chart is divided among Asian, European, African, South American, and Oceanian immigrants.

In USA, the data

depics

that Asians represent the largest immigrant group in the country accounting for 35% of the immigrant population. This is closely followed by the European sector taking up 30% and South America which accounts for a fifth of the surveyed population. Meanwhile, Africa and Oceania only make up 15% of

USA

's immigrants combined.

Meanwhile, South Americans are the most dominant group in

Brazil

comprising 35% of their immigrant

population

followed by Europeans representing a quarter. Asians, on the other hand, only accounts for a fifth of immigrants in the country which is 15% less than in the USA. However, Africans and Oceanians are more prevalent in Brazil in comparison as they make up 20% of the population altogether.

Unexpectedly, South Americans cover the majority of immigrants in Brazil despite being located

the same continent. This is in contrast

to USA

, which almost exclusively accommodates individuals from other regions.