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The response provides a general overview of the trends in police staffing levels but contains several grammatical errors and lacks clarity in some parts. The data is not always accurately represented, and the structure could be improved for better coherence and cohesion.
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| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 4.0 |
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Question
Discuss the trends in police force staffing levels in four US states over a decade.
Summarize the staffing trends for each state.
Identify any significant fluctuations or changes.
Compare the staffing levels between the states.
#Public Services
#Line Chart
Submitted Answer
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The line graph produced illustrates the
trrends
in police
force staffing
levels in four US state over a decade. Indicating different changes over the cource
of the decade.New York has
proven
to be the most dominant state with more than 12,500 (in 2019), police
being staffed
over the period of a decade. Oppositely
Florida prove
to be the least popular in the number
of police
men placed
in the state for their alllocated
duties. Though Florida has proven
to be less staffed
over the course of these years
, like New York
they have proven
to have a steady incline in the number
of police
placed
for their duties.Texas, like Florida and New
York
has proven
to have an increase in its number
of police
men, with 9,500 indiviaduals
being for placed
for their duties, proving
to have 1,000 more staff than Florida. California
unlike the rest of the provinces
has a flactuating
cahnge
in the number
of police
staff placed
in the city, with changes taking course about every year
. To further extend this point, in the year
2015 every year
had a steady incline in the number
of police
staffed
, whilst California had a changing number
in
staff during that period.