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The response provides a general overview of the trends in police staffing levels but lacks detailed analysis and contains several grammatical errors. The coherence and cohesion are affected by unclear sentence structures and a lack of logical flow. Vocabulary usage is adequate but could be more precise and varied.
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| Task response | 5.0 |
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Question
Discuss the trends in police force staffing levels in four US states over a decade.
Summarize the staffing trends for each state.
Identify any significant fluctuations or changes.
Compare the staffing levels between the states.
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#Line Chart
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The line graph produced illustrates the trends in
police
force staffing
levels in four US states over a decade. Indicating different changes over the course of the decade.New York is shown to be the most dominant state with more than 12,500 (in 2019),
police
being staffed
over the period of the decade. Oppositely
Florida proved to be
the least popular in the number
of police
men placed in the state for their alllocated
duties. Though Florida has indicated to be less staffed
over the course of these years, like New York they have illustrated a steady incline in the number
of police
set for their duties.Texas, like Florida and New
York
has pointed to have an increase in its number
of police
men, with 9,500 indiviaduals
being for placed
for their duties, proving to have 1,000 more staff than Florida. California
unlike the rest of the provinces
has a flactuating
change in the number
of police
staff placed in the city, with flactuations
taking course almost every year. To further extend this point, in the year 2015
every other city had a steady incline in the number
of police
staffed
, whilst California had a changing number
in
staff during that period.