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The response provides a general overview of employment trends but contains inaccuracies in data interpretation and lacks clarity in some descriptions. Grammar and vocabulary are adequate but could benefit from more precision and variety.
| Overall score | 5.5 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 6.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 4.0 |
| Total Errors | 15 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 6 | |
| Lexical resource | 3 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 3 |
Question
Analyze the employment trends in the manufacturing sector in the United States, China, India, and Brazil from 2000 to 2015.
Describe the overall trends for each country.
Highlight any significant fluctuations.
Compare the employment patterns among the countries.
#Employment Sectors
#Line Chart
Submitted Answer
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The line graph illustrates the employment rates in the manufacturing industry in four countries: United States, China, India, and Brazil from 2000 to 2015. Overall, all countries have shown an increase in their rates over the given period,
except United States
.The employment pattern
china
is reflecting a growth from 45 in 2000 to just above 55 in 2005, then just below 65 in 2010. And finally at 70 in 2015. While overall increasing by 25, the trend showed a slight curve rather than a steady rise. Furthermore, China leads first in the greatest increase and with the highest rate. Similarly, both India and Brazil have experienced a rise in their trends, with India starting at 25 in 2000, slightly above 30 in 2005, then again around 30 in 2010, and finally just above 40 in 2015. This reflects an almost gradual
stable increase by 15-20. Whereas
Brazil prominently demonstrates the only steady gradual increase of all, beginning with 30 in 2000 and peaking at 40 in 2015.On the other hand, the United States shows a decline in its
employement
direction, as it comprises of
55 in 2000, almost 50 in 2005, subtly below 45 in 2010, and at around 40 in 2015. This indicates a decrease by
15. Besides this, Brazil and India are the two countries to behave correspondingly, increasing gradually and by around the same amount.