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The response provides a general overview of the data but lacks detailed analysis and contains some grammatical errors. The coherence and cohesion could be improved by better structuring the information and ensuring logical flow between ideas.
| Overall score | 5.5 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 15 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 8 | |
| Lexical resource | 2 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 2 |
Question
Examine the changes in the average body mass index (BMI) of adults in four different regions over a seven-year span.
Outline the overall trend in each region.
Identify any significant changes and potential reasons.
Compare the regions and discuss any notable differences.
#Health and Fitness
#Line Chart
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The line graph illustrates the average body mass index (BMI) of adults from 2013 to 2019 in four different regions: North America, Asia, South America, and Europe. Overall, it can be observed that there was a gradual increase of the BMI in all four regions over the seven-year period.
The BMI of adults in North America started at 28.5 in 2013 and extended to 29.4 in 2019. This overall increase of 0.9 ranks the highest increase of BMI in the four regions. Consequently, South America, Asia, and Europe leads second with an increase of 0.6. South America
begun
with a BMI of 27 in 2013, and ended at 27.6 in 2019. Similarly
in Asia, in 2013, the BMI was at 23
reaching to 23.6 in 2019. Furthermore, in 2013, Europe was peaking at 25.5 and at 26.1 in 2019.This overall increase suggests potential evolution in various factors to consider. For instance, North America saw a growth over the given period proposes an expansion in the food resources, and an alleviation of the processed meals leading to a well-balanced, quotidian
nutrientional
diet. Subsequently, the increase in Europe might be due to poor transportation modes, which requires a huge amount of walking, cycling, or even running. Just as Europe, South America could possibly has
been working on incorporating extracurricular, physical activities to elevate the fitness level in adults. As for Asia, this increase reflects that the plan to aim for a healthier lifestyle which include
all restaurants to serve
unprocessed, homemade foods and emphasize
daily walking has been in progress over the seven-year span.