IELTS Writing Academic Checker - Sample Band 5.5
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5.5
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The response provides a general overview of the data but lacks precision in describing trends and specific data points. Grammatical errors and limited vocabulary range affect clarity and coherence, while the task achievement is hindered by insufficient detail.
| Overall score | 5.5 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 14 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5 | |
| Lexical resource | 4 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 2 |
Question
Describe the changes in the number of commuters using different modes of transport in New York City from 2010 to 2020.
Summarize the main trends for each mode of transport.
Compare the fluctuations among the different modes.
Identify any significant changes or anomalies over the period.
#Transportation
#Line Chart
Submitted Answer
English:
Words:170
Paragraphs:6
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The line graph
demostrates
the changes in the amount of people commuting using 4 uniqe
modes of traveling in New York city between 2010 and 2020.Overall, the majority of people during the period used
subway
to travel .Although subway, bicycle, and car
wintnessed
an increase in the number of users, bus experienced a decline after increasing for the first 3 years of the period.All of subway, bus, bicycle and car commuters saw an increase during 2010 and 2014, with subway commuters being over 500 thousands in 2014. The number of people commuting
with
cars has steadily increased to reach approximately 500 thousands, just a little under subway, and over bus and bicycle commuters.between 2014 and 2020, the amount of travelers using bus has decreased reaching slightly under 300,000.
Another dip happened to the number of subway commuters, falling from around 540,000 to 530,000, with it being the slightest decrease, respectively. The proportion of Bicycle riders has doubled more than 2 times during the period.