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6.0
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The response provides a general overview of the data but lacks precision in describing trends and specific figures. Grammatical errors and limited vocabulary range affect clarity and coherence, while the logical flow is somewhat disrupted by inaccuracies in data interpretation.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 6.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 10 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 3 | |
| Lexical resource | 2 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 2 |
Question
Analyze the line chart representing the number of participants in outdoor recreational activities in four US states from 2010 to 2020.
Summarize the participation trends for each state.
Identify any periods of rapid increase or decrease.
Compare the trends and provide insights.
#Sports and Recreation
#Line Chart
Submitted Answer
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The line graph compares four US states in terms of the number of participants in outdoor recreational events between 2010 and 2020. Overall, it is clear that the number of people taking part in
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activities in all four states rose over the period shown, with California having the most participants.As presented, it seems that people in California and Texas were more willing to take part in outdoor entertaining activities. In 2010, 300 people joined the activities in Texas, and this increased steadily until 350 in 2020. Furthermore, participants in California had a tremendous increased than Texas. In 2010, there were 400 people took part in the activities, and this increased by 200 participants in 2020.
On the other hand, Florida and New York Had
less
participants throughtout
10 years. 200 people in Florida and 150 people in New York joined the outdoor activities in 2010. Participants in both two states grew steadily, with 300 people in Florida and 250 in New York.