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5.5
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The response provides a general overview of the data but lacks precision in describing trends and figures. Grammatical errors and awkward phrasing affect clarity, and the vocabulary is somewhat limited, impacting the overall coherence and task achievement.
| Overall score | 5.5 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 30 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 16 | |
| Lexical resource | 7 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5 | |
| Task response | 2 |
Question
The line chart illustrates the immigration and emigration figures in France, Italy, Japan, and Mexico from 2010 to 2020.
Describe the overall trends in immigration and emigration for each country.
Highlight any significant fluctuations or notable events in the data.
Compare the immigration trends between Japan and Mexico.
#Immigration and Emigration
#Line Chart
Submitted Answer
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The line chart shows the immigration and emigration of four different
countries
namely France, Italy, Japan and Mexico between 2010 to 2020
.Overall, France leads the highest immigrants where many people had settled in the
country
while Japan had the lowest number of
immigrant
reported.In similar data, France had the most people
leave
the country for
good
while Japan stayed the least number of
emigrant
migrated to other countries.
France began at 15,000 people who stayed
at
the country in 2010 and continously
increased
to approximately 25,000 people in 2020.followed by Italy that started to around 13,000 in 2010 and rose to around 17,000 in 2020.
Japan`n immigration in 2010 had 10,000 of people chose to live in the country for good and slightly
increased
by 5% in
2020
while
Mexico
where it had the lowest immigrants to around 8,000
people
increased
dramatically to 18,000
people
overtaking Japan in 2020.
On the one hand, France stayed the highest number of people
leave
the country started at 7,000 people and continously
increased
to 12,000 people leave
the country. Followed by Italy that had 6,000 people in 2010 that leave
the country and rose to 12,000 in 2020. Mexico had only 5,000 people in 2010 and incraesed
by 5% in 2020. Lastly, Japan is the lowest that had only 4% in 2010 that chose to work and settled in other
country but increased
slighly
by 2% in 2020.