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The response provides a basic overview of the data but lacks clarity and precision in describing trends and figures. Grammatical errors and awkward phrasing affect readability, while the vocabulary is limited and sometimes inaccurately used.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 22 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 8 | |
| Lexical resource | 7 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5 | |
| Task response | 2 |
Question
Describe the changes in the number of commuters using different modes of transport in New York City from 2010 to 2020.
Summarize the main trends for each mode of transport.
Compare the fluctuations among the different modes.
Identify any significant changes or anomalies over the period.
#Transportation
#Line Chart
Submitted Answer
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The line chart presented illustrates data on the amount of passenger taking various of
vehecles
for their transport in New York City between year 2010 and 2020.Overall, the number of people used subway, car and bicycle were
an upward trends
, moreover they were slightly growth from 2010 to 2020, compared to the number of
poportions
used subway and bus which the line
gragh
reveals the fluctuated
beween
yeat
2014 and 2016.
Nevertheless, the figure of commuters choose
to travel by subway was the highest since year 2010 until year 2020, while the bicycle vehicle was the least choice among the people.The total of individuals usage by bicycle just under 100,000 peoples in 2010, and slightly increase approximately above 100,000 peoples, similarly to car. However, the number of passenger started used subway in year 2010 was the highest amount, about 500,000 peoples, hence in year 2014 was a modest fall
untill
it was hit year 2016. It continue
slowly grew up in 2020.Despite that, the amount of users took the transport by bus, started from 300,000
peoples
in 2010
and
it was fluctuated, it was approximately about 300,000
peoples
in year 2012 to year 2016, and it started slight fell until
end
of the year.