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The response provides a basic overview of the data but contains several inaccuracies and lacks clarity in describing trends. Grammatical errors and limited vocabulary usage affect the overall coherence and task achievement.
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Question
Examine the energy consumption patterns in four major cities over a 15-year period.
Provide an overview of the consumption trends for each city.
Identify any significant periods of change for each city.
Compare the overall trends and discuss any similarities or differences.
#Energy Consumption
#Line Chart
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The line chart illustrates the percentage of energy consumption patterns in New York, Tokyo, London and Sydney between 2005 and 2019.
Overall, energy consumption among three major cities namely New York, Tokyo and Sydney increased steadily.
London`s
household had the second to the lowest energy consumption but fell dramatically over the decade.In New York, the percentage of households with energy consumption started at around 1,000% in 2005. This figure increased steadily each year, reaching approximately 1,300% by 2019,
maintining
its lead over the other cities. Similarly, Tokyo saw significant growth. In 2005, around 900% of Japanese households had consumed most of the electricity, and this figure rose consistently, reaching close to 1,200% by the end of the period.Sydney where had the lowest energy consumption in 2005 by approximately 700% , it also experienced consistent growth followed a similar trend to Tokyo and New York and reaching a peak of approximately 1000% in 2019. While London began at 800% in 2005 and this gradually decreased to around 680% in the
enrgy
used by Americans.The three cities did not experience any significant fluctuations as all experienced steady growth in household energy consumption over the 15-year period . The most notable difference is the rapid decrease energy consumption in
london
.