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The response provides a basic overview of the trends in tourism revenue but lacks clarity and precision in data interpretation. Grammatical errors and limited vocabulary usage affect the overall coherence and task achievement.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 4.0 |
| Total Errors | 28 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 10 | |
| Lexical resource | 11 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 3 |
Question
The line chart illustrates the annual revenue generated from tourism in four cities from 2010 to 2020.
Describe the trends in tourism revenue for each city.
Identify any cities with significant revenue changes.
Discuss possible reasons for the observed trends.
#Tourism
#Line Chart
Submitted Answer
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The line chart
gives
information about the annual revenue generated from tourism between 2010 an
2020, considering four city like New York, Paris, Tokyo and Dubai. We can se that
Dubai shows a stesdy
growth but in a first part has had a slight slowdown. In the same way
Tokyo, but has totaled
low
value. We have also
New York that has had an increase until 2019 and than
has had a
unexpected fall like Paris. It's
interestinf
understand the trends. In fact, New York and Paris behave in the same way but with difference values
like Tokyo and Dubai. Another important element is that New York started with high figures but has arrived with low
values in 2020. So, in 2010 the highest number is New York and the lowest
is Dubai. Instead
in 2020 the things are change anche
the higest
value is Dubai and the lowest
is became
Paris. If we analyse these information
, we understand the reasons of
these changes are caused by social and economical situations or particular events or also sinks like Covid-19.