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The response effectively describes the trends in physical activity across the four countries, with accurate data references. However, the analysis could be more detailed, and the logical flow between points could be improved for better coherence.

Overall score	6.0
Grammatical range and accuracy	5.0
Lexical resource	7.0
Coherence & cohesion	7.0
Task response	5.0

Writing Task

#Health and Fitness

#Line Chart

Describe the trends in the line chart showing the percentage of people engaging in physical activities in four different countries from 2010 to 2020.

Summarize the overall trend for each country.

Identify any periods of rapid change.

Compare the trends among the four countries.

Submitted Answer

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The line chart exhibits the percentage of individuals participating in fitness activities from 2010 to 2020. The surveyed countries represented in the graph include

USA

, UK, Germany, and

Japan

which all showcased an

increase of

overall fitness activity after a decade.

Among the four nations, Germany stands out as the one with the most active population, a position that was further solidified after its rapid growth between 2011 and 2015. On the other hand,

USA

shows the most erratic

trend

following a few dips in 2013 and 2018. In UK, relatively steady growth can be observed aside from a slight drop in 2012 just like Japan that follows an identical trend at a less significant level.

Despite USA's fluctuating patterns, the country still managed to recover and exhibit growth following its last decline in 2018. However, the UK could surpass USA soon if the former continues to maintain this development over time. Germany and Japan, meanwhile, show no signs of relinquishing their positions as the most and least physically fit country respectively, but

don't

seem to be showing signs of decline either.

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Total Errors	13
Grammatical range and accuracy	6
Lexical resource	2
Coherence & cohesion	3
Task response	2