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The response provides a general overview of population trends but lacks precision in data interpretation and contains grammatical errors. Improved coherence and a wider range of vocabulary would enhance the overall quality.
Overall score6.0
Grammatical range and accuracy6.0
Lexical resource6.0
Coherence & cohesion6.0
Task response5.0
Total Errors12
Grammatical range and accuracy4
Lexical resource3
Coherence & cohesion3
Task response2
Question
Describe the population growth trends shown in the Line Chart for Toronto, Tokyo, New York, and London from 2000 to 2020.
Summarize the overall trend for each city.
Identify any periods of rapid change or decline.
Compare the growth rates among the cities.
#Population Growth
#Line Chart
Submitted Answer
English:UK English
Words:151
Paragraphs:4
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The illustration displays the tendencies in the increase in population of 4 cities: Toronto, Tokyo, New York, and London between 2000 and 2020.
Overall, the total number of residents in Toronto is much smaller compared to the other three cities. Besides, all cities experienced a steady
anual
rising, and Tokyo has the most throughout increase rate.
In 2000, Toronto initially only had just over 2.
6 millions of
citizens, which is smaller than other countries approximately 3 times. This figure witnessed a
slightly growth
anually
, and reach its peak of around 3.3 million in 2020.
On the other
hands
, New York and London, has their population at nearly 7 million, while Tokyo had 8 million individuals in 2000. While both New York and London shared nearly a same increasing pace, with the increase about 500000 people, Tokyo's population soared to reach to peak of around 9 million in 2020.

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