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The response provides a general overview of the trends in BMI across regions but contains inaccuracies in data interpretation and lacks detailed analysis. Grammar and vocabulary are adequate, though there are some errors and limited variety in sentence structures.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 6.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 9 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 2 | |
| Lexical resource | 1 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 2 |
Question
Examine the changes in the average body mass index (BMI) of adults in four different regions over a seven-year span.
Outline the overall trend in each region.
Identify any significant changes and potential reasons.
Compare the regions and discuss any notable differences.
#Health and Fitness
#Line Chart
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The graph shows the percentage of change in body mass index (BMI) for adults in four regions from 2013 to 2019. Overall, all of the regions showed upward trends over the period given.
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2013
the highest percentage of BMI was seen in North America, accounted for approximately 28.5%. The percentage then slightly increase during the following years and reached its peak in 2019 at around 29.5%, making North American as the highest BMI population over the period given. Furthermore, the second highest BMI region in the beginning was South America, starting at 27%. The trend only showed a little growth by 0.5% within 6 years. Similarly, Europe also experienced the same trend, starting at about 25.5% in 2013, then reached 26% at the end of the period. The lowest percentage of BMI in the figure was seen in Asia from 2013 to 2019. The trend started at 23% and ended at around 23.5%, making Asia as the lowest BMI region over the six-year period.