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The response contains several inaccuracies in data interpretation, such as the incorrect use of 'million' for immigrant numbers. Grammar and vocabulary are basic, with some errors affecting clarity. Coherence and cohesion are adequate but could be improved with better organization.
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| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 7 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 1 | |
| Lexical resource | 1 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 2 |
Question
The bar chart displays the annual number of immigrants to the United States from four regions (Asia, Europe, Latin America, and Africa) from 2015 to 2020. Describe the trends and notable points in the immigration patterns.
Compare the immigration numbers from each region over the given years.
Identify any regions with significant increases or decreases.
Discuss the possible implications of these trends.
#Immigration and Emigration
#Bar Chart
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The graph illustrates the immigrants from Asia, Europe, Latin America, and Africa in the United States between 2015 and 2020. Overall, Asians hold the largest numbers in the US during these years and have a big gap with the other regions. While Europe and Latin America only have a slight difference, the number of African immigrants is the lowest.
In 2015, the number of Asians who immigrated to the US was almost reached 800 million people. It also increased significantly and rose to its peak in 2019 with nearly 950 million immigrants. It contrasted with immigrants from Latin America and Europe, which only reached around 600 million and 450 million respectively. Immigrants from Latin America only grew in 2016, and since then, it kept decreasing until it reached its lowest point in 2020. Even though the Europeans did not show a drastic change in numbers, it rose slowly to almost 500 million in five years.
The lowest number of immigrants came from Africa, with only around 200 million per year. The highest number came in 2020, but it was not even half of the number of Europeans in the same year. It increased consistently, although the numbers were not drastically changed.