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The response provides a basic overview of the data but contains several grammatical errors and lacks clarity in some parts. The vocabulary is adequate but could be more varied, and the logical flow needs improvement for better coherence.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 17 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 7 | |
| Lexical resource | 5 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 2 |
Question
The bar chart depicts the participation rates in cultural activities among different age groups in Canada for the year 2020.
Describe the participation rates of each age group in different cultural activities.
Highlight any age group that has a significantly higher or lower participation rate.
Discuss any noticeable trends or anomalies in the data.
#Cultural Participation
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The given graph illustrates the percentage of people who participated in 3 cultural activities at 6 different age groups in Canada in 2020.
In
generall
, the rate of people who joined Music Concerts was the highest for the age groups from 18 years old to 44 years old. In contrast, that of 45-54 and 55+ age groups most like participating in Theater
Performances.In the one hand, it can be seen from the graph that the percentage of Canadian who like joining Music Concert was the highest at all 3 different groups. However , it declined gradually from the highest percentage at 50 percent to 40 percent, and, in particular, for the age groups 18-24 and 25-34 respectively and
end
at 30 percent for 35-44 age groups. In contrast, the statistic
for the participation in both theater
performances and art exhibition increase
slightly, started at 15 percent and 10 percent and end at 25b percent and 20 percent respectively.In the other hand,
theater
performances was
the most favourite cultural activities for both age groups from 45-54 and 55+, started at 30 percent and reached a peak of 35 percent respectively. Following is the Art Exhibition with a slight climb from 25 percent to 30 percent, in particular, for the age from 45 to 55+. In contrast, the data for the Music concert was the lowest and seemed to have a decrease trend, from 20 percent to 10 percent in 2020.