IELTS Writing Academic Checker - Sample Band 6
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The response provides a clear description of the data but lacks a detailed analysis of trends and comparisons. Some grammatical errors and limited vocabulary usage slightly affect the overall coherence and task achievement.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 7.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 10 | |
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| Lexical resource | 3 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 2 |
Question
The bar chart shows the levels of cultural participation in traditional festivals across four countries: India, China, Brazil, and Germany in 2021.
Compare the levels of participation in traditional festivals across the four countries.
Identify any countries with notably higher or lower participation rates.
Explain any trends or patterns observed in the data.
#Cultural Participation
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The given bar diagram clearly depicts the percentage of the population taking part in
cultural
and traditional festivals in 2021 across 4 diverse countries: India, China, Brazil and Germany. Despite the existence of the coronavirus, the citizens of the countries did not fail to celebrate their culture and heritage. In India, 60% of the population was engaged in some sort of participation in their respective festivals. 50% of the Chinese citizens had undertaken a role in cultural
participation. Similarly, 40% of the people of Brazil and 30% of the Germans had taken their time to keep their traditions alive. Hence, the participation has reduced by 10% in each country as the population has decreased, with India having the highest participation and Germany having the lowest.However, on a larger note, the graph elucidates the
cultural
diversity in all four nations. India, being one
the largest populated countries, is home to a diverse population celebrating various cultures and ideologies, as compared to Germany, whose population follows more or less the same traditions and morals. It is important that smaller and less populated countries, like Germany and Brazil, encourage their population to really look into celebrating their cultural
diversity and keeping their heritage alive for future generations.