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The response provides a basic comparison of energy consumption in Japan and India but lacks depth and clarity. Grammatical errors and limited vocabulary affect the overall coherence and task achievement.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 23 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 10 | |
| Lexical resource | 5 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5 | |
| Task response | 3 |
Question
India
Japan
Discuss the energy consumption distribution in the industrial sectors of Japan and India.
Compare the energy consumption proportions in the industrial sectors for both countries.
Identify the primary sources of energy in each country’s industrial sector.
Explain the potential impact of these consumption trends on their respective economies.
#Energy Consumption
#Pie Chart
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The following pie charts represent the percentages of consumption of energy in
japan
and india
. As we can see
japan
is mainly depending in
electricity like 35% , Which might be due to excessive use of technology in every economical area. While in india
the use of technology is less so
that is why the main energy source is Coal . On the other hand
both countries uses 10%of the renewable source which is better environmentaly
. Furthermore
if both countries try to use all the
souces
of energy more like natural gas, oil , coal, renewable, and electricity and try to equalize all the
all of energy
consumption
it would be better for the economy and for the environment.