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The response provides a clear overview of the data trends but lacks detailed analysis and comparison. Some grammatical errors and limited vocabulary range affect the overall quality.

Overall score	5.5
Grammatical range and accuracy	5.0
Lexical resource	6.0
Coherence & cohesion	6.0
Task response	5.0

Writing Task

#Technology Adoption

#Table

Analyze the table showing the number of smartphone users (in millions) in four different countries over six years.

Highlight the overall trends in smartphone adoption.

Discuss any periods of rapid growth or decline.

Compare the patterns among the countries.

Year	China	United States	Japan	Mexico
2015	690	220	50	35
2016	750	230	55	40
2017	800	240	58	45
2018	850	250	60	50
2019	900	260	62	55
2020	950	270	65	60

Submitted Answer

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The data presents the number of people who use smartphones (in millions) in four distinct countries from 2015 to 2020.

Overall, the number of smartphone users is constantly

increasing

in the four countries throughout the whole period, with China recording the

highest

number of smartphone users followed by the

united states

2015

the number of smartphone users in the

united states

was 220 million and continued to

increase

by 10 million each year until it reached 270 million by the year 2020.

At the beginning of the period china had the

highest

amount of smartphone users which was 690 and constantly

increased

with a

higher

rate compared to other countries until it reached 950 million users by 2020 which was the

highest

recorded number among the four countries.

While on the other hand

japan

and Mexico are also showing increase in the numbers of smartphone users but

a lower rate compared to

united states

and china. In

mexico

the number of smartphone users is constantly

increasing

by 5 million each year while

japan

is showing slower rates compared to the other three countries.

IELTS Writing Academic Checker - Sample Band 5.5

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Total Errors	18
Grammatical range and accuracy	8
Lexical resource	4
Coherence & cohesion	4
Task response	2