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The response provides a general overview of crime trends in various cities, but lacks precision in data interpretation and contains some grammatical inaccuracies. Improved coherence and more accurate data referencing would enhance the overall quality.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 6.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 11 | |
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| Lexical resource | 3 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 2 |
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| City | 2015 | 2016 | 2017 | 2018 | 2019 | 2020 |
|---|---|---|---|---|---|---|
| New York | 5.3 | 5.1 | 4.8 | 4.9 | 5 | 5.2 |
| Los Angeles | 6 | 5.8 | 5.7 | 5.6 | 5.5 | 5.4 |
| Chicago | 7.2 | 7.1 | 7 | 6.8 | 6.9 | 6.7 |
| Houston | 8 | 8.1 | 8.2 | 8.3 | 8.4 | 8.5 |
| San Francisco | 3.5 | 3.4 | 3.6 | 3.7 | 3.8 | 3.9 |
Summarize the information provided in the Table about crime rates in different cities from 2015 to 2020.
Compare the crime rates between the cities.
Identify any significant trends or patterns.
Discuss any fluctuations or anomalies in the data.
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The data compares the frequency of crimes across five American states between 2015 and 2020.
Overall, crime rates in Houston steadily rose each year, and consistently held its position as the number one city with the highest rates. In contrast, San Fransisco witnessed the least crimes despite slightly peaking throughout the
five year
period.Generally, Chicago and Houston had the highest amount of crimes
comitted
at 7.2 and 8 in 2015, respectively. While Houston saw a slight rise to 8.5 by 2020, the rates in Chicago steadily dropped each year, reaching 6.7 in 2020. Similarly, the rates in LA fell yearly, from 6 in 2015 to 5.4 by 2020.San Fransisco and New York comprised much lower rates, starting at 3.5 and 5.3 in 2016, respectively.
While San Fransisco saw a slight increase throughout the years,
with the exception of
a 0.1 drop in 2016, New York experienced fluctuations, from a sudden decline in 2017 to 4.8 before rising again to 5 in 2019 and 5.2 in 2020