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The response provides a general overview of the data but lacks precision in describing trends and comparisons. Grammatical errors and limited vocabulary range affect clarity and coherence, while some data points are inaccurately reported.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 6.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 13 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 3 | |
| Lexical resource | 5 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 2 |
Question
Analyze the changes in the percentage of total retail sales attributed to e-commerce in the UK, Canada, Japan, and Australia from 2005 to 2020.
Identify the overall trend for each country.
Highlight any periods of significant change.
Compare the trends and suggest possible reasons for the similarities or differences.
#Retail and E-commerce
#Line Chart
Submitted Answer
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The chart
gives us
information about percentage
of total retail sales changes attributed to e-commerce over 15 years
starting from 2005 to 2020. There are 4 countries included such as UK, Canada, Japan, and Australia.Overall, The UK had the
highest
percentage retail sales among others from the beginning until the end of the chart, while Australia was the lowest
until 2010 and the lowest
changed to Canada until 2020.The UK started with 5% of total retail sales in 2005, and the
highest
increase were occured
in 2010 and 2018 for approximately 5%. However, the other countries were competing each other and Australia was the most improving country. Initially, Austraila had the lowest
trend than other with total for about 2% and steady increase for about 1% each year until 2009. In 2009, Australia started to always increase for around 3% each year. In 2010, Canada became the lowest
after Australia, and in 2019, Australia able to beat Japan with total of 1% higher
, but Japan still 2% higher
than Canada.