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The response provides a general overview of renewable energy consumption across sectors in four US states, but lacks precision in data interpretation and contains grammatical errors. Improved coherence and a more varied vocabulary would enhance the clarity and effectiveness of the analysis.
| Overall score | 5.5 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 26 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 12 | |
| Lexical resource | 8 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 2 |
Question
Compare the renewable energy consumption in different sectors in four US states in 2019.
Provide an overview of renewable energy consumption in each state.
Compare the consumption in residential, commercial, and industrial sectors.
Highlight any state with notably higher or lower consumption in a specific sector.
#Energy Consumption
#Bar Chart
Submitted Answer
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The chart below depicts the
comparision
between usage
of renewable energy by various sectors in several places in USA
- California,Texas,New York and Florida- in the year 2019.By evaluating the data given, California had the highest usage of recycled energy among other states in two different
areas
which were, 300 TWh by
commercial
, 250 TWh by
residental
,however, industries only
used
200 TWh which was less
incomparision
to
other
two sectors.
Texas came at
the second position as it had the highest use of energy by factories i.e.
300 KWh, following by the commercial
businesses which is 250 TWh, but residence
used
only 200TWh of energy. New York had used
the minimal amount of energy comparing
to its neighbouring states
which was 200TWh from commercial
, 150Twh by residental
and only 100TWh by industries. Florida used
a little higher than New York as Residential consumed around 180 TWh, Commercial used
approximatelt
220TWh and industries had 150 TWh of renewable energy.In an overview,
Commercial
sectors used
more amount of energy out of other three but
California can be considered as the more active city in term of
consumption of renewable energy.