IELTS Writing Academic Checker - Sample Band 5
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The response provides a general overview but lacks clarity and precision in data interpretation. Grammatical errors and limited vocabulary usage affect coherence and task achievement.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 15 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 8 | |
| Lexical resource | 1 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 2 |
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| Country | Remittances (Billion USD) | Percentage of GDP | Number of Emigrants (Millions) |
|---|---|---|---|
| India | 89 | 3.4 | 18 |
| Mexico | 54 | 4.1 | 12 |
| Philippines | 35 | 9.8 | 10 |
| Egypt | 30 | 8.2 | 8 |
| China | 65 | 0.5 | 10 |
| Nigeria | 25 | 6.1 | 5 |
The table provides information on the annual remittances received by selected countries from their emigrants in 2022.
Describe the remittance data for each country.
Compare the remittance amounts among the countries.
Identify any significant trends or patterns in the data.
#Immigration and Emigration
#Table
Submitted Answer
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The chart
bellow
is a projection of yearly income of six countries from their emigrants in the year 2022. Overall, the chart displays Nigeria, Egypt and Philippines as countries with the smallest revenue and China, Mexico and India with the highest.First attribute playing
vital
role is share of GDP. In this particular order, Philippines, Egypt and Nigeria share the position with the highest proportion of GDP on average of 8%. Whereas, Mexico, India and China have in average 2% of GDP linking to China decreasing the average with 0.5% of GDP.Second feature is the amount of emigrants given in millions. Nigeria and Egypt had only 6 million emigrants on
average
while India and Mexico had approximately 15 million emigrants. China and
Philippines
share the same amount of emigrants, being 10 million, the difference of profit varies in 30 billion USD attributing to the
Chinas
percentage of GDP being 0.5% and Philippines, being the highest of all six countries, 9.8%.