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5.5
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The response provides a general overview of the data but lacks precision in describing specific trends and comparisons. Grammatical errors and awkward phrasing affect clarity, while vocabulary use is adequate but not varied.
Overall score5.5
Grammatical range and accuracy5.0
Lexical resource6.0
Coherence & cohesion6.0
Task response5.0
Total Errors19
Grammatical range and accuracy6
Lexical resource8
Coherence & cohesion3
Task response2

Writing Task

#Cultural Participation
#Bar Chart
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of citizens attending cultural events (such as theater, music concerts, and art exhibitions) in three different regions of Australia in 2018.
Describe the participation rates for each type of cultural event in the three regions.
Identify any regions with particularly high or low participation rates.
Discuss any observed trends or notable features in the data.

Submitted Answer

Words165|Paragraphs4
English:UK English
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The bar graph
show
the rate of people who attend cultural events such as
theater
, music concerts, and art exhibitions alongside three different regions of Australia in 2018.
Overall, the portion of music concerts accounted for over 30%
each
region, the highest percentage is 40% in New South Wales.
Looking at the graph more closely, one can see that the percentage of
theater
performances in Queensland hit a low of 20%, while the others
recoreded
over 20%. Also, the proportions of Music concerts and Art exhibitions made up for
same
percentage. Meanwhile, both
Theater
performances and Art exhibitions got
same
percentages as 25% of people in Victoria. On the one hand, the ratio of citizens who enjoy music concerts in New South Wales was the biggest part among those three events, followed
theater
performances and art exhibitions.
As you can see above the graph, people who live in those three regions in Australia enjoyed cultural events variously
but
they tended to
enjoyr
musci
concerts more.

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