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The response provides a basic overview of the employment distribution but lacks clarity and precision in data interpretation. Grammatical errors and limited vocabulary usage affect the overall coherence and task achievement.
Overall score5.0
Grammatical range and accuracy5.0
Lexical resource5.0
Coherence & cohesion5.0
Task response5.0
Total Errors22
Grammatical range and accuracy7
Lexical resource8
Coherence & cohesion4
Task response3

Writing Task

#Employment Sectors
#Bar Chart
Describe the employment distribution across different sectors in three major cities in China for the year 2022.
Summarize the overall employment trends in each city.
Compare and contrast the employment sectors between the cities.
Identify any significant fluctuations or unique patterns.

Submitted Answer

Words149|Paragraphs2
English:US English
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The bar chart
show
us data of the employment distribution in three major cities from
diffrent
sectors in
china
for 2022. Overall, the number of employment in Shanghai, Beijing and Guangzhou from three different sectors are high.
The employment distribution from service sector in the three cities
are
the same with 50%.
Meanwhile
the
distrbution
number for
thr
other two sectors are
diffrent
in each city. In each city, agriculture sector sectors have 5%
diffrent
from each other. Guangzhou
have
the most number for agriculture sector with 20% of distribution and shanghai have
olny
10%. The different in each city for the number of employment in Manufacturing sector is around 5% to 10%. With shanghai have the most distribution for employment with 40% and
guangzhou
for the least amount of employment in Manufacturing sector with only 30%. Beijing having the most equal distribution of employment in each
sectors
with

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