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6.5
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The answer accurately describes the population growth in the four cities, but there are minor grammatical errors and some inconsistencies in data interpretation. The coherence and cohesion are good, but the logical flow could be improved. Vocabulary usage is appropriate but could be more varied.
| Overall score | 6.5 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 7.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 7.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 7.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 9 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 2 | |
| Lexical resource | 1 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 3 |
Question
Describe the population growth in different regions of China over a five-year period.
Summarize the key trends across the regions.
Compare and contrast the growth in different regions.
Mention any regions with significant increases or decreases.
#Population Growth
#Bar Chart
Submitted Answer
English:
Words:142
Paragraphs:4
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The bar chart
illustrate
population growth across four major cities in China—Beijing, Shanghai, Guangzhou, and Shenzhen—between 2010 and 2015.Shanghai had the highest population in both years, growing from 24 million in 2010 to 25 million in 2015. Beijing follow closely, with a population decrease from 21 to 20 million over the same period. These two cities experienced steady, moderate growth.
In contrast, Guangzhou and Shenzhen saw more notable increases. Guangzhou's population grew from 13 million to 14 million, while Shenzhen experienced the largest growth, rising from 10 million to 12 million.
Overall, while all regions exhibited population growth, Guangzhou and Shenzhen shows more significant increases compared to Beijing and Shanghai, which had smaller, steadier growth rates. The most substantial growth occurred in Shenzhen, marking it as the region with the largest population rise over the five-year period.