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5.5
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The response provides a general overview of the employment distribution across sectors in three Chinese cities, but lacks precision in data interpretation and contains grammatical errors. Improved coherence and a wider range of vocabulary would enhance clarity and engagement.
Overall score5.5
Grammatical range and accuracy5.0
Lexical resource6.0
Coherence & cohesion6.0
Task response5.0
Total Errors18
Grammatical range and accuracy6
Lexical resource5
Coherence & cohesion4
Task response3

Writing Task

#Employment Sectors
#Bar Chart
Describe the employment distribution across different sectors in three major cities in China for the year 2022.
Summarize the overall employment trends in each city.
Compare and contrast the employment sectors between the cities.
Identify any significant fluctuations or unique patterns.

Submitted Answer

Words117|Paragraphs2
English:UK English
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The bar chart compares the employment distribution across different sectors in three major cities of china in the year 2022. Overall,
services
sector had the highest employment distribution among the three cities and the least employment rate was in
agriculture
sector in
shanghai
.
Looking into more details, a constant 50% rate of employment has been seen in service sector across the 3 cities. However, a fluctuating trend in distribution was seen in manufacturing sector in the order of highest shanghai approximate 40%,
guangzhou
with 30% and least Beijing with around 15%. A
releavtively
low rate of employment distribution seen across the cities is
agriculture
which had 20% rate in
gungzhou
, 15% in
beijing
and 10% in
shanghai
.

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