IELTS Writing Academic Checker - Sample Band 7
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The response accurately describes the trends in renewable energy consumption across the four countries, with a clear comparison of Sweden's significant increase. However, the language could be more precise, and the structure could be improved for better coherence. Some grammatical errors and limited vocabulary range slightly affect the overall quality.
| Overall score | 7.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 7.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 7.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 7.0 | |
| Task response | 7.0 |
| Total Errors | 10 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 2 | |
| Lexical resource | 3 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 4 | |
| Task response | 1 |
Question
The line chart illustrates the percentage of renewable energy consumption in four European countries (France, Spain, Italy, and Sweden) between 2005 and 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Describe the general trends for renewable energy consumption in each country.
Highlight any years with significant changes or fluctuations.
Compare the renewable energy consumption trends among the countries.
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Submitted Answer
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Paragraphs:2
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The above chart shows the data of the energy consumption in four major countries, Italy, France, Spain, and Sweden, in Europe.
Initiatiating
the summarization with Sweden, this country followed a relative steeper trend as compared to the other three countries whose data of usage of renewable energy resources followed a gentle slope. As for Sweden, this country doubles its use of energy resources in 2020 with a 60 percent usage as compared to the 30% in 2005 which indicates a significant increase of
energy consumption in the period of 15 years.However, the other three countries followed the same pattern and showed a 15% increase at the end of the recorded period. In 2005, Italy, France, and Spain had the energy consumption of 5, 10, and 15% respectively. Whereas, by the end of 2020, they showed a 15% increase by increasing their renewable energy consumption to 20, 25, and 30% respectively. In conclusion, the energy resources are being used at the significantly higher rate in Sweden in each year while the other
contries
are gradually increasing their percentage consumption.