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The response provides a general overview of the trends in obesity rates but lacks precision in data interpretation and contains several grammatical errors. Improved coherence and more varied vocabulary would enhance the clarity and depth of the analysis.
| Overall score | 5.5 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 19 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 12 | |
| Lexical resource | 2 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 2 |
Writing Task
#Health and Fitness
#Line Chart
Analyze the changes in the obesity rate (%) in the USA, Canada, Germany, and Japan from 2005 to 2015.
Describe the overall trends for each country.
Highlight any years where significant changes occurred.
Compare the obesity rates between the countries.
Submitted Answer
Words203|Paragraphs5
English:
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The Given Graph illustrates the changes in the obesity rate in the USA, Canada, Germany and Japn from 2005 to 2015.
Overall
All
the four countries have a similar increasing
trend.USA having
highest
obesity rate of 30% in 2005 increased
continuously to 33% in 2008 and dropped to 32% in 2009. Again there was a
increasing
trend , but a slight drop from 36% to 35% in 2013 . It finally settled at 38%
continuing to be the country with highest
obesity rate.Canada had
25
% obesity rate in 2005 . It increased
to 33% in 2015. It was a continuous growing graph without any drops. Similar trend with Germany too. Germany had 20
% obesity rate in 2005 and went up to 30% in 2015.Japan had the most stable and steady graph.
it
had 10
% obesity rate in 2005 and went up to 14% in 2015. Japan had the least difference of 4% increase in 10 years while all other countries had a difference of 8%. Since the rate of increase in obesity was similar in all four countries, the positions have been same as the start. US
having
the highest obesity rate, followed by Canada, then by Germany and Japan having the least.