IELTS Writing Academic Checker - Sample Band 6
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The response provides a general overview of the data but lacks specific details and clarity in some areas. There are grammatical errors and limited variety in sentence structures, affecting coherence and lexical resource usage.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 6.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 13 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 1 | |
| Lexical resource | 5 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5 | |
| Task response | 2 |
Question
The bar chart illustrates the average monthly income levels of five different cities in Europe over a period of 10 years.
Summarize the main trends shown in the chart.
Compare the income levels among the five cities.
Identify any significant changes or anomalies.
#Income Levels
#Bar Chart
Submitted Answer
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The Data reveals the
average
monthly income of citizens across five different cities in Europe-Berlin, Paris, London, Madrid and Rome in a period of two decadescumulatively, the chart shows that the amount of income people were earning in these cities ranged in variations throughout the years, with some cities regularly surpassing others in terms of income levels. Although monthly income has risen substantially across all regions
thoughout
the years, London had the highest average
monthly income among these cities, with the highest of 3500 in 2020. Paris and Berlin were closing on with 3100 and 2800 respectively in 2020 with Rome and Madrid having the lowest in this time range scoring 2700 and 2600.Even though
average
income has risen since 2000 to 2020, the data brings to light the same level of difference in income between these 5 cities, with London leading the charge closely followed by Paris and Berlin while Madrid and Rome have
lagged behind
.
The income levels in every city was the highest in 2020 and the lowest in 2000, A trend that remained relevantin conclusion,
Average
income varies in all the 5 cities but in the progress of the last two decades, this number has been
ever increasing
in all cities, A trend that will likely be the same in the coming decades because of the job opportunities and the education increasing in all five respective cities if something catastrophic or unfortunate does not occur.
e.g. Economic Meltdown