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The answer provides a general overview of the data but contains several grammatical errors and lacks coherence in some parts. The task achievement is adequate, but the lexical resource could be improved with more varied vocabulary.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 6.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 10 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 3 | |
| Lexical resource | 2 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 2 |
Question
The bar chart shows the percentage of people participating in cultural events in different cities in the USA in 2022.
Summarize the information by describing the general trends.
Identify any significant fluctuations or outliers in the data.
Compare participation rates between the cities.
#Cultural Participation
#Bar Chart
Submitted Answer
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The Bar Chart illustrates percentage of people participating in cultural activities across five USA cities: New York, Los Angeles, Chicago, Houston and Phoenix in 2022.
Overall, Chicago ranks the highest rate in culture involvement with 70%. In contrast, Houston
possess
the least percentage
totalling to 40%. This demonstrates a significant discrapency
between these two states.In second place follows Los Angeles, with approximately 65% , which is 5% less than Chicago. This is a minor difference, often making it impossible to predict what the future looks like because of this trend.
In respect to New York, it comes third in this trend with roughly 55%, surpassing Phoenix with 5% placing Phoenix on the fourth position. Consequently, this depicts the gap between Phoenix and Houston to be slightly greater than the difference between other states.
Hence, it is analysed that there is no considerable variation between the highest and the lowest city in culture involvement.