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6.5
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01 Apr 25, 12:28
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Overall Feedback

The response accurately describes the data and uses a range of vocabulary and grammatical structures effectively. However, the coherence could be improved by better linking the comparisons and ensuring a smoother flow of ideas.
Overall score6.5
Grammatical range and accuracy5.0
Lexical resource6.0
Coherence & cohesion7.0
Task response7.0
Total Errors21
Grammatical range and accuracy7
Lexical resource10
Coherence & cohesion3
Task response1

Writing Task

#Technology Adoption
#Pie Chart
The pie charts show the distribution of technology adoption rates in various sectors in the United States and China in 2022, measured in percentages.
Compare the distribution of technology adoption between the United States and China.
Identify any significant differences or similarities in the adoption rates in both countries.
Discuss any noticeable trends or patterns in the data.

China

United States

Submitted Answer

Words153|Paragraphs3
English:US English
Global Issues:
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Grammar Range
Logical Flow
Technology adoption rates
between United States
and China seem to follow a similar pattern in terms of sector breakdowns. Smartphones
is
the
largest
contributor of technology adoption in both country, although the percentage is higher by 5% for China. Laptops trails behind as the
second
largest
contributor, with
United
States' percentage being higher by 5% compared to China.
A stark difference can be noticed for the
third
largest
contributor of adoption rates. Tablets
is
United
States'
third
largest
contributor while Smartwatches
is
China's
third
largest
contributor, both standing at 15% contribution. For the
fourth
largest
contributor, the sectors are reversed, whereby Smartwatches is United States'
fourth
largest
contributor, while Tablets is China's
fourth
largest
contributor, both having 10% contribution,
The smallest and
fifth
largest
contributor of adoption rates is the same for both countries, whereby VR Headsets trails the pack standing at 5% of contribution for both United States and China

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