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The response provides a general overview of the data but lacks precision in describing trends and specific figures. There are several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, which affect clarity and coherence.
| Overall score | 6.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 6.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 6.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 6.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 20 | |
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| Lexical resource | 12 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 2 |
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| Year | New York | London | Tokyo | Sydney |
|---|---|---|---|---|
| 2017 | 15 | 12 | 18 | 10 |
| 2018 | 16 | 13 | 19 | 11 |
| 2019 | 17 | 14 | 20 | 12 |
| 2020 | 18 | 15 | 21 | 13 |
| 2021 | 19 | 16 | 22 | 14 |
| 2022 | 20 | 17 | 23 | 15 |
Discuss the data on the number of fitness centers per 100,000 people in various cities from 2017 to 2022.
Identify the main trends.
Compare the number of fitness centers between cities.
Mention any significant increases or decreases.
#Health and Fitness
#Table
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Presented here is a table juxtaposing the number of fitness
center
per 100 thousand individuals in 4 differrent
metropolitant
cities, which are New York, London, Tokyo, and Sydney, recorded in the 6-year period.Overall, there was an increasing in the number of sport complexes among those 4 urban areas. Indeed, Tokyo experienced the highest number of health
centers
throughout the reccord
, followed by New York, London, and Sydney respectively.The statistic also displayed that the remaining bid cities—London, NYC, and Sydney— witnessed a
sligth
growth in the number of fitness centers
as well. For instance, London had 17 sport complexes, rising from merely 12 in 2017. In addition, while there were 15 sport clubs located in New York in 2017, they elevated by one quater
in the next 6 years. Last but not least
, Sydney
Australia had exactly 10 sport
centers
in 2017. Later in 2022, the number of fitness centers
jump to 15.