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The response provides a basic comparison of the age distribution in India for 2015 and 2045, but lacks clarity and precision in language. Grammatical errors and limited vocabulary affect the overall coherence and task achievement.
| Overall score | 5.0 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 5.0 | |
| Lexical resource | 5.0 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 5.0 | |
| Task response | 5.0 |
| Total Errors | 25 | |
| Grammatical range and accuracy | 13 | |
| Lexical resource | 7 | |
| Coherence & cohesion | 3 | |
| Task response | 2 |
Question
India 2015
India 2045
The pie charts compare the population distribution by age group in 2015 and projected for 2045 in the country of India.
Compare the age group distributions between 2015 and 2045.
Highlight any significant changes in the population structure.
Discuss potential effects on the labor market and healthcare system.
#Population Growth
#Pie Chart
Submitted Answer
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As
showing
in the pie chart, in 2015 and 2045 most of population
aged
from 25-54
years old. However, 2015 with 35% while 2045 with 33% of all population. Also
in 2015 and 2045 less of population
aged
from 65 years and over, while 2015 with 8% and 2045 with 13%. And its
given that in 2045 the number of population aged
from 15-24
years old and the number of population aged
from 55-64
years old will be same.As we see,
Its
clear that population distrbution
by aged almost decrease in 2045 campares
to it in 2015. Althought
its increase in '55-64 years and 65 years and over' groups.No one can deny that this decrease and increase will impact on the
labor
market. While labor
market will decrease by the decrease of
population aged
from 25-54
years. Either, the healthcare system will increase by the increase of
population aged
from 65 and over in 2045.